Help me record a new song

I wrote a new song a few days ago as part of the 2011 songwriting challenge, and I’d like you to help me record it. I’ve got a basic demo going. Have a listen to it here:

I Have A Plan For You (demo) by Brian Wahl

I thought it would be cool to let you all listen to this and add your input.

  • What do you like about it?
  • What do you think I should add?
  • Put some drums in there, maybe?
  • Is the mix off?

The basic parts I’ve got recorded are:

  • Vocals
  • Acoustic (picking and then strumming)
  • Strings/Pad
  • Electric guitar (lots of delay and reverb)

The song is based on Jeremiah 29:4-14.

Let me know your thoughts in the comments. And thanks for helping!

  • Adam

    Love It! Some drums would be cool

    • admin

      Thanks, Adam! I could see some drums coming in where the acoustic guitar starts strumming. Maybe I’ll give that a shot.

  • Nelson

    Gracias Brian, por compartir aquello que Dios te dió, fue una bendicion encontrarte… Dios te bendiga.

  • Kathleen

    Hey Brian, I love the intimate feel at the beginning. The lyrics “I’ll bring you home; I won’t let go” are powerful. Then, I’m not sure if it’s keys or electric guitar, but the ringing sound is too much. It comes into the forefront, and I think it should be in the background. I also really like the parts where you use some fingerpicking. The song is personal and intimate, so I’d say to guard against overpowering instrumentation.

    • http://www.brianwahlmusic.com Brian

      Hi Kathleen!

      Thanks so much for stopping by and listening to the song and commenting! The part you’re talking about is electric guitar. I just thought it needed a little something to build dynamics, but I can see what you’re saying. I don’t want to create an intimate mood with a song and then jar the listener with something harsh like that. Thanks for the input!

      I’m thinking this isn’t going to go into a big full band type of sound, and if I did decide to do that, I’d like to have two versions – one that stays mellow and one that gets big.

  • Joyce

    Great song Brian! I agree that it has a very personal/intimate nature to it.

    For technical stuff:

    Definitely could use some percussion – not just “drumming”, but different things like cymbal swells and then at the build, adding the toms into the full set of the drums – and then, of course backing off of the drums back into percussion/cymbals/swells as you taper to the end.

    I also think the song could benefit from a female bgv at the build section midway – adding to the intensity of the build section.

    I don’t think you need to change the mix – especially if you add in the drums and possibly a bgv in some sections.

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    Side note: I think it’s awesome that you gave us all a chance to give a listen and comment before it is all done/complete! Makes us feel like we’re sitting there creating it with you.

    Keep using your gifts/talents for HIM, Brian!

    from a fellow singer/songwriter in Christ,
    Soli Deo Gloria,
    Joyce

    • http://www.brianwahlmusic.com Brian

      Hi Joyce! Thanks for stopping by and commenting. I’m with you 100% on bringing in some percussion – cymbal work type stuff. And background vocals! If I have a weakness as a singer and recording engineer, it’s definitely doing harmonies and vocal production – as well as other weaknesses, ha!

      I’m really enjoying hearing feedback on this – very cool. At this poing, I’m trying to record demos of all the songs I’m writing in 2011, and then maybe toward the end of the year (or sooner), I’ll pick the best and try to record a proper album with them, so this type of feedback is very valuable to me.

      Do you have some music recorded out there that I can listen to? I’d love to hear it. Make sure to connect with me over at Twitter or Facebook – I really like connecting with other artists.